Pay attention to the capitalization and placement and uses of different pronouns. Lemme know whatcha think!
Him.
It has received the kiss of the Devil,
Tasted the sweet stench of His breath
And replied unfaithfully
It has touched the face of God, and seen everything.
A language unspeakable
A dialect too complex
For this frivolous, blissful soul
At the mercy of such vex
A mind torn
Between desire and pride
Between what is genuine and delirium
Between Love, Passion, and hatred
And as such felicity is achieved
Through pain and triumph
She no longer remains numb
She sees into herself and beyond
She sees Him.
Feedback on this poem?abtuvurys 2005
I am a poet so I can tell you what is good and bad.. I would say that the poetry is very good. But if there is a knock, it may be a little to deep for most people to understand.
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It's different. I like it. I think.
OMG that is like somthing shakespeare would write i love them type of poems u did really well on that one good luck with your poetry!
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